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     The coffee was gone, but the rich aroma still lingered in the small corner shop. A smile curled its way onto Dani’s face as she watched the last piece of trash fall into the bin. A contented sigh escaped her and she stretched, looking around.  It had been a successful first week. The Smooth Brew was a hit amongst everyone young and old. She couldn’t believe the outcome.
     “Goodnight.” She heard the last two girls say as they pulled their coats close before exiting the building.  She waved absentmindedly after them.  Not wanting to mess up the chairs, she made to sit on the counter.  It was quiet, the exact opposite to what it had been the entire week. Dani had to admit; she never thought she’d see the day that her dream would become a reality.
     The night passed on and Dani was startled from her thoughts at the sound of the clock in the town center coming to life, counting the hours. She listened carefully and panicked as the tenth chime faded and was followed closely by the eleventh. It was already this late? In a rush, she quickly checked that everything was closed up before dashing out of the door to go home.

     Dani hesitated outside of her apartment door. She didn’t have to look at the time to know it was well past midnight. She had stayed too long at the café celebrating alone in her success.  Worrying her bottom lip slightly, she took a deep breath before walking through the door.  It didn’t take her long to find him, the sound of the television echoing throughout the spacious rooms.
     “I’m home, Jared,” she said upon entering the living room. She frowned when her husband didn’t turn around to at least acknowledge her.
     “Look, I’m really sorry I’m home so late. The shop was busy as all get out today! It was a total success!” Dani explained, walking over to stand beside his chair. Her heart sank when he still didn’t look up at her.
     “Jared, please. Look at me…” Dani pleaded, her voice breaking at the end.  “Jared!”
     He moved, shifting ever so slightly, away from her. He rubbed his arm and cleared his throat. Dani’s lip quivered as she watched her husband break her heart. Why couldn’t he be more understanding?  She never meant for work to interfere with their lives to the point that it created such a huge rift between them.  
     She reached down to touch his arm, but thought better of it. She refused to be the needy one in their relationship. He was the one acting childish. The café was newly opened, so the work load was bound to be more demanding. Things would settle down soon enough. Then, and only then, would she attempt to fix something that shouldn’t have been broken in the first place.
     Walking away, she glanced back once more, hoping to at least catch him looking away quickly from her. At least then she’d know that he still cared. However, his gaze was unwavering, still locked onto the screen before him.

     Crawling into bed, Dani buried her face into her pillow. She felt them, but the tears never came.  The unrelenting urge to cry never left her, even as she drifted off to a restless sleep. Out in the living room, the sound came to an abrupt halt and a moment later Jared walked into the room. He stood in the door way for a moment, staring at the bed in front of him. A sigh escaped him as he reached up to run a hand through his hair.
     Walking around the bed, he paused, looking at the opposite side; Dani’s side. Closing his eyes, he laid down in bed, burrowing under the comforter, even though it was plenty warm in the apartment. Silence stilled through the bedroom only to be broken a moment later by a small, unmistakable sob.
     “I miss you, Dani….”

     The following day, Dani’s spirits were lifted only slightly by the hustle and bustle of the shop. Her thoughts continuously drifted back to Jared. She felt the tears threaten once again, but refused to acknowledge them. Forcing a smile, she turned to walk towards the office, waving cheerfully at a, now, regular customer.  
     “What’s he doing here?”
     The whisper caught her attention.  It was a quiet whisper, meant only to be heard between the waitresses standing next to her. However, Dani paused in her reach for the doorknob and turned to see who had suddenly caught the interest of her staff.
     “He never comes here anymore...”  Dani’s eyes widened in confusion.  What were they talking about?
     “Not since that happened…” Happened? What happened? She stepped forward, her hand outstretched.
     “Jar—“
     “Hi, Jared.” The man’s distant eyes never met Dani’s. Instead, they stared steadily past her.  Her breath hitched and she turned to see her sister standing just behind her; her eyes holding the same distant sadness as her beloved Jared’s.
     “What’s going on here, Sara?” Dani asked, her voice tight with anxiety.  Sara stepped forward, holding up a package that Dani hadn’t noticed.
     “It came today, Jared,” she said softly, as if speaking any louder would hurt her. Dani was getting annoyed. What was happening?
     “What came today?” She demanded, stomping her foot in a childish attempt to be heard.  She heard a strangled noise behind her and looked to see that Jared was near tears. Her heart went out to him, and, without thinking, rushed to help him. However, he walked past her, as if she weren’t even there.
     “Let me see it,” he pleaded. Hands shaking, he retrieved the package from Sara. His breaths were fast and shallow and he blinked rapidly, forcing the tears out of his sight. Dani watched in bewildered silence as he slowly unwrapped the brown paper package.
     The brown wrapping fell to the floor, followed closely by Jared as he dropped to his knees in an undignified lump.
     “Jared!” Dani cried, rushing over to him. She was beat, however, by her sister who knelt down beside him, holding him close and rocking him slightly.  Dani’s face grew hot. What was the meaning of this? Jared was her husband! Why was Sara comforting him? In front of her, no less!
     “Jared, sweetie, I’m so sorry. So, very sorry. I miss her, too.  I’d give anything to have her back right now. She’d be so proud. Proud of you and this café. We’ll hang this on the wall, right over there. Everyone can see her and she’ll never be forgotten. She’ll always be loved by you, by us, by everyone. ” Sara soothed.  Dani froze in place, the sound of Jared’s sobs being the only proof that time hadn’t completely stopped.
     “Miss…her…?” Her voice barely an audible whisper. She stepped forward, her body reluctant, as if she were made of cement. Leaning over her loved ones, she glanced at the object of Jared’s sadness.
     Crying out, she stepped away quickly, a hand reaching up to cover her mouth. The urge to cry was back, but the tears never came. They never would. She stepped forward again, only this time she reached out to Jared. She sobbed as she watched her hand pass through his mahogany locks, never touching him.  
     Her crying faded, leaving only the heartbroken weeping of Jared as he clutched the plaque tightly to him, his tears falling down onto the face of his departed wife.

                                               In Memory of
                                      Daniel "Dani" Marie Wallace
                                                1980 - 2008
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The 'In Memory Of' at the bottom is what is inscribed on the plaque that Jared is holding. This story isn't dedicated to anyone...T-T Sorry for any confusion..

Also, I realize it doesn't say how she died. I never intended for it to. I guess it is a 'Reader's Choice' sort of thing. The point of the story is that she's dead, but still lingering...

I don't know of anyone caught it this, but even though Dani is doing all of these things, it never once says she actually did it. Physical things...making objects move and the such. She believes she's doing all of these things and doesn't realize she isn't/can't.


Okay! First things first....

I will be entering this piece into a contest called Loving Love - Contest. So, wish me luck for that.

That aside, here is a little information on this.

Words: 1,252

This was originally my story idea for a contest in a magazine, which I hope to still enter. It was a writing prompt, of sorts. The story had to start out with the line:

The coffee was gone, but...

And, then, you pretty much just finish it how you like. I've been working on this story for a few months now, but, only just tonight, finished it.

I had a bit of a rough time figuring out how to write this. I went through two or three revisions before this one was finalized.

It also inspired a series of short stories revolving around a coffee shop and romance. When and if i find time for it (let alone find the motivation), I definitely want to work with the ideas. The book itself will be called Coffee Break and will basically just be a collection of short stories revolving around a coffee shop.

I hope you enjoy this piece! Let me know what you think!
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:iconkage-ichihashi:
I really, really liked this. :hug: Great job.
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=Lumaris Oct 17, 2008  Student Digital Artist
Wow, this is so sad, touching, and gripping. Great work, I loved the emotion in this <3
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*Candlelights-Chaos Oct 16, 2008  Student Artisan Crafter
amazing! O.O I can't believe that you pulled that out of your mind, it's insane and very different than what I use to you reading. I love it though!
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~AKAcorn Oct 20, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:blushes: Thanks!
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:iconneurotically0urs:
:worship::clap: you did it again
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~AKAcorn Oct 15, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
:blushes: Thanks!
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